More and more people want to own items, such as cars, clothing and other things, that are made by famous brands. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

In recent years around the world public running behind the
brands
in every aspect of their basic needs.
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want
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in
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society as a branded icon. In
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they are ignoring the fact of
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hard earning money and vanishing the small scale industries producing
best
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quality
products
. In my
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ruining behind famous
brands
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of negative rather than positive.
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, especially the young generation
are
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more
attracting
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towards the luxurious
products
due to attractive brand promotions. They want to be
first
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person
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people
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who
need
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to hold that product on
first
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day of launch.
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, Apple release new mobile gadgets
in
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every year fall and
public
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through out
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the world will line up in
queue
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to hold in firsthand. In
recent
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there were multiple people who sell their blood to purchase
this gadgets
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on launch day. On other hand, we are ignoring the local
brands
which are manufactured
products
with
same
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features and
quality
as luxury
brands
. The domestic
brands
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unable to sell their
products
and eventually end up with lockout industries. It leads
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unemployment and financial loss to that nation.
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, the local mobile manufacturer in India produce mobile with same features and
quality
unable to capture market due to brand value and shut down unit leads their employees jobless. In conclusion, the above points strongly agree the people desire towards branded
products
leads had
lot
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of disadvantages. We are supposed to see the
quality
and features of
products
instead
of running behind
brands
.
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