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More and more people want to own items, such as cars, clothing and other things, that are made by famous brands. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

#people #items #cars #brands #development
In recent years around the world public running behind the
brands
 in every aspect of their basic needs.
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The
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 want
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project
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themself
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them self
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 in
the
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society as a branded icon. In
this
process
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 they are ignoring the fact of
loosing
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 hard earning money and vanishing the small scale industries producing
best
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the best
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quality
products
. In my
opinion
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 ruining behind famous
brands
 had
lot
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 of negative rather than positive.
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, especially the young generation
are
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 more
attracting
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 towards the luxurious
products
 due to attractive brand promotions. They want to be
first
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the first
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person
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people
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 who
need
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 to hold that product on
first
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 day of launch.
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, Apple release new mobile gadgets
in
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every year fall and
public
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the public
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throughout
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through out
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 the world will line up in
queue
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the queue
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 to hold in firsthand. In
recent
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article
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 there were multiple people who sell their blood to purchase
this gadgets
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 on launch day. On other hand, we are ignoring the local
brands
 which are manufactured
products
 with
same
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 features and
quality
 as luxury
brands
. The domestic
brands
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arebrands
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 unable to sell their
products
 and eventually end up with lockout industries. It leads
local
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 unemployment and financial loss to that nation.
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, the local mobile manufacturer in India produce mobile with same features and
quality
 unable to capture market due to brand value and shut down unit leads their employees jobless. In conclusion, the above points strongly agree the people desire towards branded
products
 leads had
lot
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 of disadvantages. We are supposed to see the
quality
 and features of
products
instead
 of running behind
brands
.
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