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Some people think that they can go to the gym to remain fit, while others think that there are other better ways to do this. Discuss both views along with your opinion.

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A few individuals believe that
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 everyone should choose the
gym
 to be healthy, whereas another group assume that, there are more options better than the tough
exercises
. I strongly agree with the
second
 group who are not recommending the
gym
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Firstly
, the people who prefer to do
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will get results instantly. But
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 at all vital for health and they may get serious health issues like heart failure, diabetes, etc.
For example
, recently in my country, one of the famous silver screen artists, who died because of excess workouts in the gymnasium.
Secondly
, whenever individuals have stopped these extreme workouts, again they will boomerang the
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heavyweight substance
.
For instance
, One of my friends, lost his weight around 15 kilograms when preferred a huge exercise place. After some days, he did not do any physical
exercises
 due to some reasons, again he gained his initial weight.
On the other hand
, To avoid the above problems, the populace should choose other healthy methods like yoga, Zumba dance and swimming. If society ops these methods to reduce the weight for fitness , they would have long-term results. To illustrate
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, research says that people who chose natural methods for activities, only remain in a better physical condition for a long time than others. To summarize
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, Health plays an important role in everyone's life. if you want to be healthy, you should do some physical exercise along with some healthy habits.
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 would definitely agree with the alternative
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