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Some feel that it is a waste of time to plan for the future and it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#feel #waste #time #plan #future #focus
Some people are of the opinion that one should concentrate on
present
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 and ignore
the
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future planning believing
its
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 a
time consuming
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 activity. I completely disagree with the above said idea as planning for upcoming
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 provides direction to
life
 and ensures financial and
health
 stability.
To begin
 with, planning ahead in advance provides direction to one's
life
.
This
 is because
,
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goals are required
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in order
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inorder
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in order
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 to determine the path to follow.
Moreover
, once goals are set, people thrive to work upon
it
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them
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 to achieve it that
inturn
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in turn
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 defines our
present
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present-day
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day
 activity and provides us
the
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 purpose on how to spend each present
day
.
For example
, If a student wants to
enroll
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 for a good university in
coming
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the coming
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 3 years
were
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where
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cutoff
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the cutoff
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 of marks goes highest , he will
definately
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definitely
 work much harder from the present
day
 to accomplish it which provides him
the
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 path to follow eventually.
Furthermore
, advance planning
also
 ensures financial and
health
 stability.
This
 is because
life
 is very uncertain in nature and we need to be prepared to face any situation that can come our way in
coming
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 days. If one is guarded with enough finances through future planning, money and
health
 problems could be solved much more effectively.To exemplify, in
current
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 pandemic situation, all daily wagers were hugely
effected
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 not only for their
day
 to
day
 living but
also
 by
health
 ,
conversely
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 people who had done savings ,
were
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 able to survive without having much impact. To sum up, it is true that we should live in present,
however
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 it is completely inappropriate to say that advance planning is waste of time . Planning for
future
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the future
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 ensures direction to
life
 along with stability in terms of finances and
health
.
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