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These days people prefer to eat ready food outside of their home rather than home made food. Do you think this has more advantages and disadvantages

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It is
beleived
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believed
 that most of the people prefer fast
food
 over
home made
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homemade
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food
 . In my personal opinion ,
this
 trend has more disadvantages than advantages . We will see both pros and cons in
this
 essay. Fast
food
 is a better option for office goers and for the household where both husband and wife are employed .
Mostly
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 employees of IT companies do not find time to cook , So fast
food
 is an easy and affordable option for them .
Also
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 these types of
food
 are very delicious tempting our taste buds to buy them often . It is
also
 easily available and very
budget friendly
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 .
Eventhough
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Even though
 , fast
food
 has many advantages , on the
downside
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 it poses harmful effects on human health . Most of the
fast
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food
restaurents
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restaurants
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colored
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substance
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 in order to make it look delicious . Many
researches
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 proved that these substances are the primary catalyst for cancer in human beings . And
also
 there are many reported cases of
food
 poisoning and stomach ulcers due to daily consumption of fast foods . To conclude , apart from all the advantages ,fast
food
 is dangerous to human health and leads to serious health issues.
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