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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environments, such as the South pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many
people
 believe that now
people
 absolutely have a chance to travel to strange atmospheres like the north
pole
 or south
pole
. In my perspective, it has its own positive aspects and
also
 has drawbacks. On the one hand,
traveling
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 to strange environments makes a significant contribution to science and
also
 benefits for
traveling
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travelling
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.
First
 of all, finding some new kind of strange environments, exploring some weird creatures which will assist scientists to research about our
world
.
For example
, when explorers go through the Amazon forest which is the largest forest in the
world
, they are shocked because of the abundance of weird creatures that they have never seen before, which met the demand for searching about the formation of historic mankind.
In addition
, when
people
 can develop many tours in some strange locations
such
 as the south
pole
, tourists will have special experiences that they never forget which will promote the development of tourism.
On the other hand
, approaching some secret locations in the
world
also
 has some potential hazards for
people
’s lives. The history of the
world
 was prolonging in billions of years,
therefore
 there were huge weird animals that we do not know. And maybe there are many reasons with regard to the missing of them.
For instance
, in the north
pole
 where the temperature always keeps in minus hundred Celcius, the scientist explored many historical viruses which overtake the danger of coronavirus. With a lot of activities in the north
pole
 of humanity, we are positively approaching the spread of ice in the northern continent. In conclusion,
although
 enhancing the travel area which benefits many social aspects of
people
, we have to know that we must pay a price for what we do in the near future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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