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Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The young generation
tend
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 to go to study abroad which
this
 not only open their mind, increase worldwide knowledge, but
also
 bring positive perspectives for their
countries
. In my opinion, I partly agree with the statement given above. On the one hand, I suppose that overseas
students
 have great aspects for solving the quality of domestic employees’ problems. Studying in other
countries
 help
students
 have a lot of social skill, adapt with a weird environment which totally enhances human performance which helps domestic companies solve the lack of professional staff problem.
For example
, some big companies need crucial positions which help to connect with international incorporations. There is no doubt that many
countries
 in the world are on the way towards integration,
therefore
 inclining the importance of overseas
students
.
On the other hand
, when studying abroad, parcel of
students
 decide to stay where they study, which tends to the shortage of
labor
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 resources. With modern facilities, great environment,
also
 higher standard of life, some
countries
 ideal locations for living. Because of that, the situation is worse. For instants, every year, the percentage of applications for seniors overseas
students
 in Australia is sharply high which is the reason make some developing
countries
 are highly declining human resources in significant fields. In conclusion, studying abroad
students
 play a fundamental role in developing
countries
 whereas it will have side effects if these
students
 are attracted by the
countries
 where they study.
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