Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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In recent years, with
development
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the development
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of shopping industries, there are numerous methods for buying products. Based on the latest research most of the buyers are just addicted to
buy
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things that are not mandatory.
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essay discusses
about
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the reasons and
give
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some solutions.
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with,
the
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online shopping websites and
the
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applications could have negative impacts
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this
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addiction. These sites are available twenty hours of seven days which make it easier to purchase instruments. They show
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a beautiful
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perspective of products and gives a brief introduction which mostly
include
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the positive sides of it and
make
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surfer
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the surfer
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to
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order it with a simple click.
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, online well-known shops as Alibaba, eBay or Amazon give a wide range of opportunities
about
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each product and a person can add them to their buying card without any hesitation or thought.
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it up, with improving
of
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internet
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the internet
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people
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can waste money comfortably from home and buy things they do not need in their daily lives.
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, there are some solutions to prevent
people
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from buying many insufficient
stuffs
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kinds of stuff
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. The bank’s system could make applications
which
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people
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can write down their incomes and monthly
pay
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for their lives and
therefore
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, it calculates the amount of money a user can spend for monthly internet shops.
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, a famous bank from Italy made an application by name of “payment bag” which gives tips in order to control
user
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users
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. By using financial apps
people
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can maintain their wallets. To conclude, with all improvement of internet shops most of the society spend a big amount of money to purchase useless products but with help of the banks and the government control
on
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people
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accounts
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they can control the balance.
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