In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

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It is believed by some that the structure of the family and the roles that each member plays has been constantly shifting. I think that the changes that have been taking place have a lot of disadvantages even though they have brought in a few positives.
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, women have pursued careers with some competing at an equal footing with the men.
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has meant that the family income has increased. It has
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altered the part that men
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as they now have to help with the
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household
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chores. The greatest disadvantage is that children have been robbed of the valuable time that they used to
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with their mother, with some having to be sent off to boarding school.
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the pressure that working parents have has strained the relations between couples which has led to increased numbers of
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single parent
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households. One of the disadvantages that
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structure brings is that the parent is sometimes forced to work longer hours to provide for the family, which means that by the time the parent is home they would be too exhausted to engage the children or they might even be suffering from loneliness.
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the strains that families are suffering from have brought in other major shifts like some couples volunteering to not have children or creating some kind of cohabitation arrangement, in some cases married couples have looked at their
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in order for them to decide who has the biggest salary and see if it can sustain the family
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if the man earns less than his wife he
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becomes the stay at home dad or
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versa.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income
  • gender roles
  • single-parent households
  • divorce rates
  • same-sex parents
  • multigenerational
  • family dynamics
  • aging population
  • communication technology
  • child-rearing approaches
  • work-life balance
  • remote working
  • family structure
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