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Most people strive to maintain a successful career and happy family at the same time. What problems can this situation create? What are the possible solutions?

Nowadays many
people
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 try to have a better family
life
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 while they are maintaining a successful
work
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life
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. Even though it is better to try to balance both
work
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 and family
life
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,
this
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 has caused some
problems
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 for them. In
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 essay, I will discuss these
problems
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 and possible
solutions
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 to overcome those
issues
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.
To begin
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 with, it is irrefutable
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 situation in which
people
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 try to balance both career and
life
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 has caused several
issues
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. One of those
problems
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 is,
people
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 try to become successful in their career without spending some
time
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 on
work
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-related education for which they do not have
time
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 as they spend their free
time
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 with family.
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, if individual works in the IT sector,
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 during free
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, the person should keep learning new technologies that arise in the future as those help to become successful in
work
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. Another problem is, even though
people
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work
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 hard to keep good family
life
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 and job, they do not care about personal health. To illustrate, since most individuals spend their full
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 balancing
work
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-family
life
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, they would not spend any minute to maintain a healthy
life
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 by doing exercises or meditation. These are the
problems
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 that cause when a person strives to become successful in both family and
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life
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.
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, there are possible
solutions
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 to ameliorate these
issues
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. One of the
solutions
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 is, employers should allow their employees to
work
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 only for 8 hours which includes 1 hour of training that would help to improve their knowledge. Since it is undeniable that
people
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 should not spend additional
time
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 outside the office to do
work
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-related studies as they should spend those
time
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 with their family, the best approach is to include 1-hour of training within office hours so that employees could learn while they are achieving
work
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 goals. Another solution is, it is important that
people
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 should focus on personal health while they try to maintain a balanced
work
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-family
life
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.
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, after
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 or before
work
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, they can spend some
time
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 in a gym or jogging which would help to improve their health. In summary, while
people
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 strive to have a better career, they try to have a happy
life
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 same
time
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. Even though it is important to have
such
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 balanced
life
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,
this
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 situation has caused many
problems
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 for them. In
this
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 essay, I have discussed those
problems
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 and possible
solutions
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 to ameliorate the
issues
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • stress
  • burnout
  • family responsibilities
  • time management
  • relationship strain
  • prioritize
  • flexible working arrangements
  • telecommuting
  • communication
  • extended family
  • childcare
  • self-care
  • personal well-being
  • satisfaction
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