In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
Globally, the number of
people
moving to cities
from rural areas is on the rise. I believe that this
will have a negative impact on the environment
and hospital waiting times
.
Firstly
, the environment
will be impacted by high levels of traffic. If more people
move to cities
, there will be a rise in cars, buses and trains to accommodate a growing population. The gases emitted from cars and other forms of transport will lead to increased pollution and greenhouse gases. For instance
, China is the leading country with the highest carbon emissions due to
heavy traffic and a high number of people
living in cities
. Despite this
, China introduced policies to curb greenhouse gases by reducing traffic, but high levels of pollution continued to persist. Hence
, moving from the countryside seems to be a bad idea for the environment
.
Secondly
, I believe that hospitals will be overwhelmed by the sheer number of people
moving to cities
. This
would lead to longer waiting times
due to
high patient demand and lack of resources. For instance
, the waiting times
for routine hip surgery in the UK have increased rapidly for the past 10 years due to
patients moving from the countryside. This
is why migration to metropolitan areas seems to be a disastrous idea as the health of people
will be affected. Finally
, the crime rate will significantly increase because police resources will be overstretched.
To conclude
, I believe that migrating to cities
from rural areas will have a negative impact on the environment
and hospital waiting times
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