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Scientists predict in the near future cars will be driven by computers, not people. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, the development in the car industry has been changed towards driving. Researcher and automobile analyst give their opinion that incoming years
cars
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 totally depend on computer-based driving or autonomous systems. In my perspective, it is a positive development in car advancement,
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, in the course of the essay, I will discuss the positives of autonomous
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. These unmanned vehicles have numerous benefits to the whole society, but the main benefit to an individual is that he can save their driving
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 and use it for some meaningful purpose. These days government enforce a number of laws on the rodes and drivers do not use any kind of other equipment, while in autonomous
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 they can do. Recently a study published in the USA, a normal jobholder spend 20% of the
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 of his life driving a seat
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 if autonomous
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 are in the market
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 he might be spending his
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 with his family. overall, automatic
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 are positive for an individual or whole community.
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 will reduce traffic accidents or maybe negligible because most of the traffic incidence is caused by human error
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 are instructed by an autonomous system which has fewer chances of error and the system will work continually. A huge number of death caused by car accidents even
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 number will increase in less developed countries.
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 reduces sound and air pollution because these days semi-autonomous
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 are electric and
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 decrease travel costs. In conclusion, unmanned vehicles are not for from today, when it will be on the rodes
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 save
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 and people use
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 on other thing and it
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 reduces traffic accidents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Sensors
  • Collision avoidance
  • Alleviate
  • Accidents
  • Efficiency
  • Environmental impact
  • Unemployment
  • Freedom of choice
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