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is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views and give tour opinioIt n.

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It is a commonly held belief that the
death
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 penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes.
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, others believe that life long
sentence
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 is a better deterrent. Discuss both views and give tour opinion. Some
people
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 generally assume that the
death
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punishment
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 is a better option to control the dreadful criminalities, Whereas the different section of
people
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 presume that life-long imprisonment is a good notion. I strongly agree that the
death
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sentence
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 would be a great idea to inhibit cruel things.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and mention my opinion with proper examples.
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 with, nowadays, A lot of criminal activities are happening in the society yet it is having typical Laws. Criminals do not care about the laws, often they attempt illegal activities. If government impose capital
punishment
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, every perpetrator does not try to attempt immoral things. To illustrate
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, in Singapore, the legislation gives a serious life-end penalty for criminals, so the
crime
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 rate is very less in that country.
On the other hand
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, if it comes to lifetime
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,
this
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 can be optional for minor faults which are robbery cases, drunk and drive cases, drug rafting, attempt to murder etc. Because these are tiny issues and if legislate give, above
punishment
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 to them, they may change their behavioural things.
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, if authority’s give life imprisonment to bad
people
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, they may come out of prison and repeat the same.
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, in India, four juveniles attempted a dreadful and unfair outrageous
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 in 2016. They raped and murdered one girl very cruelly. Judicially they got a fixed-term
sentence
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 but again the same type of
crime
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 happened in 2020 because the criminals do not feel fear to do. To conclude
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, both the
death
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sentence
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 and life-long punishments are crucial for minimizing the
crime
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 rates. As far as I believe, the life end
sentence
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 is a vital
punishment
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 for cruel
people
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.
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