Technology is becoming an increasingly important part of education. Some people say that this is a positive development, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Do you think the increasing use of technology in education is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

There is no denying the fact that
technology
has a significant role in all aspects of
education
.
While
it is a commonly held belief that
technology
has a positive impact on
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field, there is
also
an argument that
technology
is leading to
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a negative
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influence on
education
.
This
essay will analyse
this
topic from both points of view and express my opinion. on the one hand,
nowdays
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,
education
is rely
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relies
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on
technology
in
all
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apply
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various sectors.
In other words
, the majority of people used to use
mopile
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mobile
Phone
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Phones
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and
laptop
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laptops
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to serve their tasks of assessments.
In addition
, plenty of students use
Ipad
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iPads
to solve all home
works
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work
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and it is faster and easier
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of
carry
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carrying
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books.
For example
,
in
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apply
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Saudi
Acabia
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Arabia
adopted e-books at all universities to facilitate their studies and reckon the
technology
has a
benetical
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beneficial
effect on academic
career
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careers
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.
on the other hand
, others think the
technology
has
a
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apply
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drawbacks Impact on their
eduacted
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education
. It is
also
possible to say that cheating is the
most
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issue at schools
by
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their Phones or
laptop
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laptops
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and
that's
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a play big Problems
on
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in
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education
.
Moreover
, a lot of students use
the
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technology
in a negative way,
such
as
distract
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to distract
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them from studying.
For instance
,
instead
of
concentrate
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concentrating
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on
study
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studying
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, they are playing or
scroll
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scrolling
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on social media. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
question. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that
benefits
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the benefits
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outweight
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outweigh
the drawbacks
on
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of
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education
,
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because
there
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their
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technical devices
helps
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help
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them to achieve their goals
on
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in
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long
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the long
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or short term.
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