Students should pay the full cost of their own study because university education benefits individual rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years around the world, there

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a big debate on spending money by graduates to pursue degrees from the university. Even though, it looks like the graduation certificate is beneficial to the person who received it

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we are not supposed to ignore

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knowledge will serve back to the nation. I strongly agree the complete cost of the University expense is not from the

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pocket as it leads

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young talents who are financially poor.

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Universities

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a lot of financial needs to run a quality education system. They are supposed to hire highly qualified lecturers who obviously demand high pay and they need vast expensive laboratory equipment for practical experiments.

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individual who is going to pursue their degree in

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a highly qualified environment

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to pay the full fee to maintain

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credibility and running costs.

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, if an individual student who is overqualified with his talent and financially poor is not able to pay

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much they demand. So obviously, the nation going to lose a talented individual who may make good inventions for the future generation. To consider

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point the local government

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initiative to pay the university bill based on the

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capabilities.

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, they can conduct some competitive exams to grade a

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talent and they can decide how much per cent of the expense they can pay. In conclusion, the

universities

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education

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are not supposed to stop or step out of young talent who are going to build our future. The governments

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to pay the entire payment of these young talents or they are supposed to share the fee percentage.

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Students should pay the full cost of their own study because university education benefits individual rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.

Poverty is a problem that affects the majority of children these days. Discuss the effects of poverty on society and suggest some solutions to this problem.

In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing . Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. Why is this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?