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It will be better to have a wide use of driverless cars for individuals and society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#driverless #cars #individuals #society
It is a new trend that there will be more and more
driverless
cars
instead
 of human driving
cars
 in the future.
People
 argue about if
the
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driverless
cars
 are more reliable and useful than
human controlled
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cars
 in the future.
For
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 my opinion, there are lots of advantages if
people
 drive
cars
 under the systems
setting
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. There are lots of benefits for both
individual
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individuals
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 and society when
people
 use
driverless
cars
.
Firstly
, it will be much safer when
people
 sitting in a car controlled by the
system
. The driving
system
 will make
less
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 mistakes compare to human factors,
such
 as distraction, sleepy, less experience of driving, and so on.
Secondly
, it is a
life saver
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 for
the
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disabled
people
.
People
 with
disability
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are much rely
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 on new technology in their daily life. If they can have a
driverless
 car, blind
people
 or
people
 without arms can be independent and improve their life quality by using the
system
 to control their vehicles.
Thirdly
,
driverless
cars
 will save
the
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energy for
the
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human society. Scientists and engineers will cooperate together to invent a
system
 which will cost as
less
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 petrol as they can.
For example
, the technique we have used like cruise control proves that
people
 will save more petrol under that mode. Using
driverless
cars
 can reduce the cases of human-made accidents. We can always hear some sad news like car crashes caused by human’s drunk, over-speed, neglect driving, which makes
people
 feel anxious and worried.
Driverless
cars
 can effectively help those
people
 who don’t know or are not confident in driving to hit the road. It will be much convenient and easier to use the
system
 control mode when
people
 meet extreme weather or feel tired during their driving. In conclusion, I believe the new technology will improve human-life qualities and be valued by human societies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • sensors
  • human error
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility
  • displacement
  • fuel efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • pollution control
  • ethical considerations
  • legal framework
  • data privacy
  • overreliance
  • system failures
  • connectivity
  • decision-making
  • security concerns
  • economic impact
  • maintenance
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