Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, It has been a controversial topic among people globally, whether the information
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as scientific researches, oriented-business plans, and
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acadamic
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academic
papers
should be freely accessed by everyone, or they should not be shared
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the public as a secret. In
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to conduct the thesis for accomplishing the master degree, I strongly admit that the scientific researched should be freely shared to be the literature reviews and the role models for the researches in the future. In
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, the published
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prestigious journals significantly improve the quality of my thesis.
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plants and
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soil health was formulated from the
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of several
papers
published in agricultural journals. Without the freely access
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published
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, I could not execute a master degree.
However
, some of
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informations
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information
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such
as
bussiness
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business
plans or secrets of the companies should not be shared publicly. If
these kind
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of rumours are publicly known by the
compititors
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competitors
, it may adversely affect the companies.
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, the
Coca cola
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company have never revealed the disclosure of the processes and ingredients of their
bevarage
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beverage
. As
these information
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are being kept as a secret, no one can duplicate the taste of their drink for five decades, and they are the greatest beverage company in the world.
Therefore
, some of the information should be preserved to prevent the benefits of the company. In conclusion, whether the
informations
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should be shared freely or should be kept secretly depend on the type of
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informations
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. the scientific research
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, which are able to provide benefits to
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future researches, should be
indepently
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independently
downloaded, whereas the
bussiness'
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business
business's
disclosure should not be accessed publicly to preserve the advantages of the
bussiness
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business
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • accelerates progress
  • innovative discoveries
  • transparency
  • open access
  • verify results
  • fraudulent
  • ethical practices
  • consumer trust
  • potential risk
  • misuse
  • sensitive information
  • genetic data
  • defense-related technologies
  • proprietary information
  • trade secrets
  • competitive edge
  • value
  • investment of time and resources
  • compensation
  • disincentivize
  • recoup costs
  • balanced approach
  • policies and agreements
  • sensitive data
  • fair compensation
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