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many manufactured food and drink products contain high level off sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #level #sugar #health #people
Nowadays, most
of
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the
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people
 advocate that unhealthy products which have
high
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 percentage of
sugar
 have
negative
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 impact on
people
 health.
Thus
 they believe that if
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this
 foods raise prices ,
people
 demands reduce simultaneously. I
agree
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this
 statement with two main reasons which are going to explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, many individuals accept that
Sugar
 causes numerous health problems that are obesity,
colestrol
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cholesterol
 and
diabeth
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diabetes
. Most of the experts give precautions about
risk
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 of
high level
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sugar
 using for
people
 who are keen on
sugar
.
Moreover
,
People
 do not notice
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 importance of their health So they come across
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health
 obstacles
,
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when they obtain
mindfullness
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mindfulness
 related harm of
sugar
. Plenty of Countries decided that the price of
sugar
 products raise and they undertake responsibilities from societies affect.
Similarly
, some
of
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states
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forhibid
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forbid
 that produce
food
 and drink categories
which
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 contain high levels of
sugar
.
Secondly
,
People
who
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 parents lose control upon their
children
 nutrition tendency.
Furthermore
, it is undeniable that most
of
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the
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children
 are addicted
junk
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food
. Regarding
to
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teachers,
Nutritition
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Nutrition
 plays
crucial
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 role
on
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the
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children
.
In addition
to
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, If they do not get enough
vitamin
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 and
minarel
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mineral
minerals
 , they face some
of
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problems
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 that their cognitive and physical
devolepment
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development
. To exemplify, many
school
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 in Europe, they make
a
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releated
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related
food
 plan and they increase
cost
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the cost
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 of junk foods in school canteen so they force on
children
 due to
children
 following
this
 plan and avoid
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the tendency
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of
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 buy junk
food
. To sum up, plenty of
people
 admitted that
Sugar
 is too
harm
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 materials for individuals. Sugary
foods
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praices
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prices
 should increase to encourage individuals to tend to less level of
sugar
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sugar consumption
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • encourage
  • expensive
  • reduce
  • effectively
  • discourage
  • tight budget
  • purchasing
  • disproportionately
  • lower-income individuals
  • healthier food choices
  • demand
  • regardless
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