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You have a pen friend living in another country and he/she is curious to know about the major news items in your country.

#pen #friend #country #news #items
I hope you are doing well. It has been ages since I wrote to you. I was very busy with my board examinations. It is a big step towards my future. It seems to me as if the whole world is gearing up for a new beginning with unexpectedly surprising measures. As for India, we are all demonetizing our ₹500 and ₹1,000 notes to battle black
money
. The expected amount to be ‘found’ is around £200 Billion GBP. Just take a moment to soak that all in.
This
 is a gigantic move for India as sadly there is a lot of bribery and black
money
 handling. Heck, every single person in India could be a mini millionaire if all of its wealth were to be distributed equally among its citizens. Honestly, from my point of ,view the situation is pretty hilarious. As just yesterday people were trying to rake in as much
money
 as possible, the bigger notes the better. And just in a matter of ,
hours
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 people went from gazing lovingly to simply hostilely glaring at bundles of
money
. Don’t you think all
this
 is very humorous too? But enough about my country, what about you? How do you feel about Donald Trump being elected? What new and unexpected things do you think will happen
next
?
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