Some people think that certain criminals should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bar. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The sole reason

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for

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becoming a miscreant is people being in debt or

envy

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of other person's success or love. While some people believe that

criminals

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should be spending their entire life behind

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the cell

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cell

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however

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, I, believe that they should be given the opportunity to

work

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for

unpaid

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an unpaid

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community

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communities

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and reflect on their life circumstances.

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,many

juvenile

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become part of the incident due to the lack of money or

ammenities

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amenities

they desire. These miscreants need to

be introduce

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to behaviour correction programs

in-order

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to become sober. If we put adolescent criminal who has small charges against him in the jail for longer period of time, it will make them more remorse.

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, there is a possibility of trying to escape from prison in the name of

community

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service

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but

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argue they can be found easily with the GPS device attached to

the

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each prisoner.To illustrate, many teens have

found

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been found

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guilty of theft,drug dealing and

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shoplifting

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shop lifting

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shoplifting

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in the USA, where they need to either do 90 days of the

society

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service

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put

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be put

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into prison for 60 days.

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totally

depend

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on the nature of

crime

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the crime

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somebody

accused

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of.

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, it is not beneficial to put all the

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behind bars and certain should provide guidance to opt for

community

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service

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, non-profit services

also

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give chance to request for reduction of the sentence. Many individuals who have committed a crime reduce their jail time by years by doing

community

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work

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. Even though some people believe

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is a calculated act by individuals to get bail easily, I would argue it still gives

them

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the

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ability

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to gel with society easily.

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, a criminal verdict has

reduced

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from 20 to 11 years since he has done unpaid

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in the

neighborhood

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, the

community

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service

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facility is important in the

prejudice

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culture in order to reduce the sentence for

the

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specific

criminals

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. To conclude, not only do unpaid

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services make

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realise their life choices, but it

also

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gives them

option

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to decrease the verdict sentence.

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, I agree certain

criminals

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should

made

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make

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work

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free of charge for

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community

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the community

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instead

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of putting them in bars.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

361 words

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Some people think that certain criminals should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bar. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Holding international games such as Olympic games is an exciting event. Some people think that it has positive effects while others argue it is a waste of money. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You are taking a cource at a local college. The deadline for your project was last week but you haven't finished it. Write a letter to your lecturer. In your letter: -introduce yourself. -explain why you haven't handed in the project yet. -request more time to do it.