14. People have little understanding of the important of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world.

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We live in 21 century and today humanity has achieved an incredibly high technological level. Smart devices came into our lives: smartphones, clocks, kitchen’s devices - everything is smart now. But the most important part - all those things gather data about users.

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is the way we all are being monitored 24 hours a day. That's why scientists call current time the era of information. The current essay discusses the influence of today's situation about living in the world, where one doesn't have a chance to keep secrets anymore. What are the advantages of being monitored every minute of life?

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is a tough question, but it’s not as bad as it sounds.

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, we are all users of the social networks: facebook, instagram, vkontakte etc. We usually get posts in our new feed with tags - “it may be interesting for you”. But what does it mean? The artificial intelligence proposes articles, photos and videos based on personal users preferences. And through a thousand billion bite of information we get useful and personal content without any help from our side. I guess that

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is a good thing and may be helpful for orienting on the Internet. But

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nobody likes being monitored. History remembers the day when Adward Snouden made public knowledge about the new FBI’s system for monitoring citizens of the USA. It brought on a huge social resonance. It puted in jeopardy our freedom, our rights of personal life.

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you may wonder how much google knows about you: places that you like, address of your home, what time you arrive to work, even what moment you usually wake up etc. And we give that knowledge everyday using our phones and Internet. It’s a little bit creepy, isn’t it? It seems to me that the possibility of using personal data for political purposes or in the interest of big companies would seriously damage society, and of course any advantages of using personal information never pay off.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

335 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

interdependence
globalization
technological advancements
collective action
digital evolution
minimal reliance
direct interaction
empowered
access to technology
societal expectations
personal choice
leverage

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14. People have little understanding of the important of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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