In many situations, people who break the law should be warned instead of punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the rate of crime is escalating. And
this
is because criminals are not getting the punishment they deserve. In my opinion, I firmly believe that people who break the law should be punished
instead
of being warned. The essay below elaborately explains my point of view.
To begin
with, these days we come across very brutal cases on newspapers and televisions. The sole reason for it is offenders are getting away easily with committing horrendous felonies. To illustrate, almost
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we come across barbaric
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like rape or acid throwing because these malefactors are not rightly chastised. Malfeasances like these not only ruins a girl's face but
also
her
life
. Yet, these folks get imprisonment of seven years or so whereas even the penalization of
life
long imprisonment is not enough for these sins. They can live their normal
life
but a victim can never do that. According to
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recent research,
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of rapes are increasing worldwide.
Hence
, these wrongdoers deserve severe damnation.
Furthermore
, the rate of homicides are
also
proliferating and the cause is justice is not rightfully served.
For instance
, we often come across news like the murder of an
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or cases about the assassination of an entire family. Sometimes they get a
life
long imprisonment but most of the
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because of factors like age or mental disorder they escape harsh retribution.
Consequently
, giving rise to more and more merciless felonies.
Thus
for offences like these, penalization should be strict and
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certain
factors should be ignored. To conclude, in order to put a halt
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heinous malfeasances the law system needs to be more strict. A mentioned earlier in the essay, I hold the view that folks who break the legislation should be chastised
instead
of being warned as
that is
the only way to dwindle the increasing crime rate.
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