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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#students #work #results #time #education #pressure
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In the present world, it is not rare to see undergraduates who are working and studying at the same
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. These are chances for young people to learn about social skills,
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 earn more experience in their future career. But for some, it is hard to manage their schedules, and
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 causes them stress. On the one hand, it becomes an advantage to have some experiences before you finish school. A student can learn a lot of basic skills at their part-
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 job
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 as using the Point Of Sales system, and teamwork.
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, for some juniors, a job while they are studying can support their school fees. It is
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 an opportunity for youngsters to try different
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 tasks.
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, I used to
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 at a coffee shop as a waitress.
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 gave me some extra money to buy what I wanted, but more than that, it gave me the independence to talk to foreign strangers.
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, it takes more
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 and energy of one’s life to handle an extra activity. Students who are weak at
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 management will find it difficult to balance study,
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, and rest
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 in a day. Some get trapped into earning money and totally forget about studying.
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, they cannot complete their responsibility which is education. Failure in exams is one of the results that leads students to be under depression. In conclusion, I would like to show some solutions to
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 problem. Parents could give advice to their children, they should understand why education must be the
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 priority, and others are just short terms. Colleges and universities should bring soft-skill classes like
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 management to all majors. And students should only
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 while they are in term break.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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