Write an essay about 200-250 words, giving your opinion about the following statement: "Twenty years from now, the world will be a better place to live in". Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons.

Some people have always
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that the days they live in are the worst to
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,
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and that they mark the
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beginning
of the end of
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. Look at us now, at the world we live in and ask yourself the question. It is easy to war, climate change, global warming and a lot of other
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are threatening us.
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Nowaday
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,
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the corona
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corona virus
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epidemic is still not under control, causing many countries difficulties. It is easy to
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the world coming to a horrible end , and it's even easier to think how much worse we humans could make it in 20 years.
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, just assume, 20 years later I hope
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miracles
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will come to the earth, the science will more develop
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control bad things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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