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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler?

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There is no denying, that travelling the whole globe has never been easier and more and more
people
 benefit from
this
 fact. In the following essay, I would like to discuss why is travelling nowadays so popular and how can a traveller benefit from
this
 experience.
To begin
 with, the Internet is full of useful tips on how to see the whole world for little money.
For example
, many travel bloggers share their secrets of travelling the globe almost for free, which is something thousands of
people
 can benefit from. It can be said, that thanks to the cost of flight tickets and the options of cheap accommodation and food, travelling has become a low-budget hobby.
Furthermore
, globetrotting is an enriching experience in many different ways.
For instance
, it is one of the easiest paths to choose when an individual is curious about customs and habits in different cultures. It is
also
 believed, that it is a great opportunity to make lifelong friends along the way. These kinds of friendships are special for many reasons,
for instance
, friendships with persons who have a totally different mentality can help us to broaden our horizons and to think differently. It is
also
 a great opportunity for learning new languages, because in some countries English is useless, and backpackers need to find a way
how
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to communicate with local
people
. It was proven, that persons who visited many different places during their lives are more emphatic and helpful.
To conclude
, it is clear, that
people
 travel more and more because it
affordable
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 and the arguments above have proven, that
this
 activity can literally change lives.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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