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Many people think that food companies should not be allowed to advertise while others believe that all companies should have the right to advertise? What is your opinion?

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Even with the way we all know that
food
 is one of the basic needs of life alongside clothing and shelter. It is simply inevitable to eat as humans because we all eat to live.
This
 is enough reason for
food
 companies not to advertise what they sell. A
food
business
 can easily place itself in a very strategic position in the market if it delivers a meal that people enjoy. Being the fact that they sell
food
 which already advertises itself with the taste and recipe used
nevertheless
,
this
 is not enough for a
brand
 involved in
food
 sale not to advertise. In as much as a meal is great and delicious, not marketing can limit the level of sales and exposure of
such
food
brand
 and it is
also
 limited to the existing
customers
.
For instance
, during the festive period where they can run advertisements and promotions, they will be able to, which in the long run give room for their competitors to outway them.
On the other hand
, It is of great advantage and necessity for all businesses including
food
 brands to advertise. I am of the opinion that all brands should market their products and services. When a
business
 is advertised, it is placed in a position of access to its
customers
 and potential
customers
. Great marketing results in massive sales for a
business
.
For example
, a product advertised can reach wider
customers
 than its immediate environment where it is physically known especially when it is advertised through an online platform. There are different online platforms where marketing can be carried out, like the social media platform (Instagram, WhatsApp) and others like the e-commerce website where an online shop can be opened.
Furthermore
, when companies advertise, it helps to build healthy competition among similar brands.
This
 competition helps the
brand
 see the areas in which it can do better as a
brand
. In conclusion, I believe that every
brand
 should advertise, but it should be done in a productive way.
Food
 businesses
also
 need advertisement because a delicious delicacy is not enough to bring more sales and achieve all goals of the
business
.
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