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Fewer and fewer people are writing by hand using a pen, pencil, and brush. What is the reason for this development? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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After every invention, setting a new normal changes our casual life. Nowadays, people have stopped writing letters or dairies by hand, they like chatting and
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 writing e-mails. In
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 essay, I will share my perspective on the reason we type
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 of writing.
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, the faster it is, the more it will be used.
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, typing is more functional, less tiring, and it doesn't require good handwriting.
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, when we were children for over 2 years our teacher educated us to make our handwriting look nice. It was frustrating to write letters and blends over and over again.
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, maintaining it is hard: when it lasts long without writing the speed and the clarity get worse.
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 with its positive side, formal documents are comprehensive for everyone. Depending on cursive and individuals' handwriting style, sometimes, it is hard to understand.
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, the Industrial Revolution unlocked many possibilities
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 the range of documentation work has expanded.
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, the modern technologies we use are inaccessible to the written language.
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, uniqueness might be lost. People need to be different so that we can make something more creative.
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, our predecessors developed their own patterns;
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, the artistic taste of it could be more beneficial. Case in point, marketers use different fonts
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 the colour and the design so every year in
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 busy and competitive business world new fonts would be in demand. The fonts we are using now are
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 a consequence of it too.
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, it is functional, fast, and clear but the traditional style has to be preserved as well. In the future, the trend will continue to increase.
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, we have to find a potential solution to preserve it.
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coherence cohesion
The essay could benefit from a clearer logical structure, ensuring each paragraph follows a single, clear point that contributes to the overall argument. Try to link points more explicitly with transitions.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic. This will help achieve a more comprehensive response.
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Ensure your examples and points are directly linked to your main argument and contribute to answering the question, especially when discussing the potential loss of uniqueness.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the argument and summarizing the main points discussed.
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Main ideas are generally clear and comprehensively explained, with a good explanation of why people prefer typing over writing by hand.
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The essay addresses both sides of the development, discussing both positive and negative aspects, which contributes to a balanced response.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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