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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Most governments believe that economic advancement is their most crucial goal. it is sometimes asserted that other
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most governments believe that economic progress is their most crucial goal. it is sometimes asserted that other
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. To some groups, they think that economic expansion is their most crucial goal.
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. The following cases and examples will help support my point of view. First of all, I would like to point out that economic advancement is their most crucial goal.
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most governments believe that economic progress is their most crucial goal. it is sometimes asserted that other
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 of improvement
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. Some groups way agree that economic improvement is their most crucial goal. Despite, to
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, I still agree that other
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. The case and examples mentioned above have supported my point of view to the best.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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