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It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media rich society.

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Nowadays,
media
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 are becoming more popular day by day and for
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 reason, it is extremely difficult to stay away from their influence. In
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 essay, I am going to discuss the pros and cons of modern society.
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, I think that Social Networks are one of the greatest inventions during the
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 century due to the
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 that we can meet new friends online, we can chat with other users and for many
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people
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 the
media
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 represents a way for working, in
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, several youths experimented a new work, known as ‘influencer’ where it is said that they can encourage costumers to buy products that they are advertising.
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fact
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 is provided by the number of
people
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 who post pictures on Social Networks as a consequence that users are encouraged to purchase the product.
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, it is frequently thought that it is not really needed but it is only a psychological effect when you see a picture of something you want.
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 some
people
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 argued that
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 influence by
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 can be dangerous because it is a waste of money, others said that sometimes it can be very useful in light of the
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 that you can find whatever you want and often products are discounted and for
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 reason,
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 is an opportunity to save money. In conclusion, I believe that
media
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 are a great invention but
people
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 who use them must be aware of risks and they have to understand the difference between real and fake needs because they can choose to buy the product or not. choose to buy the product or not.
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