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Band 6

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say where you think you left the papers • explain why they are so important • tell the manager what you want him/her to do Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing in order to inquire about some important papers that I left during my
last
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 visit. I am Mohinur and I live in Mubarak
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that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is far away from your place.
This
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 morning, I attended a meeting at your wonderful Nest One hotel. After my
conference
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conference,
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 I checked out of B&B. I believe that I
forgot
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left
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 my passport , documents and my tiny bag in the room
which
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in which
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 I stayed.
Firstly
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, the owner of these documents was my manager.
Secondly
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, these legal papers included the most vital information about our company.
Thirdly
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, some of these official papers contained the names of workers.
Also
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, I need them tomorrow at our next assembly. I would greatly appreciate it if I could get my documents back
in
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apply
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this
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 afternoon.
Also
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, I want you to inform me about the location of
me
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my
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 essential contacts. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully Mohinur

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task achievement
Make sure to address specific details that would help the manager locate the papers, such as the room number and any other identifying information.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences could be slightly rephrased for better clarity. For example, 'After my conference I checked out of B&B' could be confusing and might be better written as 'After the conference, I checked out of the B&B accommodation.'
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for formal correspondence.
complete response
The letter clearly lays out where the papers were left, why they are important, and what actions are desired from the manager, making it a complete and effective response.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate and effectively frame the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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