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City and local governments should provide community-wide free Wi-Fi. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#city #governments #community-wide #wi-fi
In recent years more and more
people
 have been using smartphones to communicate and laptops to work outside of the office. Some
people
 may think that community-wide
Wi-Fi
 will be beneficial for everyone and should be provided for free by municipal governments, whereas others may think tax money should not be spent on
Wi-Fi
. I personally believe that it is beneficial for local governments to provide community-wide
Wi-Fi
,
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 if
such
 a measure is implemented wisely.
First
 of all,
Wi-Fi
 has become part of the basic infrastructure in today’s world. Today, it is very common for
people
 to use smartphones all the time to communicate online or to carry laptops to a café or a park to work or study. They need their phones and PCs to be connected to the Internet, and in that sense,
Wi-Fi
 serves as the infrastructure in the same way as roads or electricity does.
Moreover
, free
Wi-Fi
 is convenient not only for local
people
,
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 but
also
 for
people
 from out of town or foreign countries. According to some statistics, many foreigners who come to Japan, my country, find the country’s poor
Wi-Fi
 availability very inconvenient. I wish we had free
Wi-Fi
 nationwide and could make their stay in Japan more pleasant.
On the other hand
, some may think community-wide free
Wi-Fi
 might not be a good idea. Installing a network of high-speed
Wi-Fi
 will cost a great deal of money.
People
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 who already have access to the Internet at home may say, “why
use
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 our tax money to pay for others?”
However
, if
people
 coming from out of town find staying in the community comfortable because of easy access to the Internet, it will benefit businesses there and, in the end, the whole community. In sum,
Wi-Fi
 can be considered an integral part of the infrastructure and if communities provide it for free, it will benefit the local community.
Therefore
, the upsides of
such
 a policy will outweigh the downsides.
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