International tourism have brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is a concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

Global
tourism
brings huge profits to
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of tourist places which carriers with it environmental issues
effecting
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local flora ,
founa
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fauna
and creatures.
Negative
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The negative
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impacts of
tourism
sometimes
outweighs
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the economic interests ,and I will discuss
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issue
further
in
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essay. World
tourism
is
florishing
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flourishing
towards the places of natural history, scenery and
favorite
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favourite
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holiday destinations and governments of concerned countries are keep promoting these events
as
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to bring maximum economic benefit to the places.
Such
activities
puts
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lots of pressure on local communities and they become overcrowded during holiday seasons which in turn puts lots of demand for local resources of water ,heat and electricity .For to catch up with
such
overwhelming demand local municipalities overusing available resources or they will be redirected to
fulfill
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those
tourism
requirements.
Such
development negatively
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affects
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effects
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affects
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lical
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local
farming , fishing and other business
wher
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where
ther
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there
they
will be
short
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a short
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supply of people and resources. Pollution from vehicles and noise negatively impacts local animals and birds
which
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living
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in those remote areas. Woods cutdown for development will reduce some special of trees and plants part by
partand
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part and
eventually they extinct from
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the
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environment. Pollution of trash and plastic
thrown
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by
tourist
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tourists
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is
greatest
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impact. So
in conclusion
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environmental harm done by
tourism
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industry is more than economic benefits so government should formulate strict rules regarding the visiting those hot destination to balance the account.
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