It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishments' is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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what is good and bad behaviour from the beginning of their school lives. I agree to a certain extent with

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the educator in the classroom is the authority and the kids need to follow their rules. If some kid exhibits terrible behaviour towards his classmates, the teacher would punish him to show the others that it is an unacceptable attitude in the classroom. Kids learn more by mimicking adults than by listening. I believe sanctions are very necessary when raising a child. The fact is, children don’t understand right and wrong.

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infant steals from a friend or a parent, that toddler should face serious consequences. Some parents might choose to strike their youngsters while others may simply take away their privileges. In terms of what kind of punishment is acceptable, opinions are divided. Sometimes, the punishments are quite severe and the adults need to be aware that it is just a kid trying to figure out how to be a human. I personally do not believe in violence, aggression or abuse as a kid’s punishment. They do not have all the emotional skills to understand their behaviour,

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the best solution to punish them is taking away something the infant really want,

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as a toy or electronic device. To conclude, boys learn how to behave through retribution. I think they learn more by imitating an adult and taking away what they like is the only way to make them listen. To conclude, I completely support the use of

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in disciplining kids.

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rely on limiting children's freedoms as the best way to punish them.

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