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Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts they reach their decision about case.

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By the laws of British and Australia, a jury is forbidden to access the previous criminal documents of the defendant. Some
people
 believe that defendants should have the right to protect themselves from being accused of the crime.
However
, many
people
 disagree with
this
 action and suggest that a jury should be able to access all past data. I totally agree with
this
 group of
people
 that a jury should consider all documents of the defendant before making a
decision
. To support my statement, in order to make an effective
decision
 for punishing someone, we should study in-depth the background of the particular person,
such
 as personality, motivation and etc.
Therefore
, it is crucial to perceive their criminal history.
For instance
, a person who have continuously made many cases, there is a possibility that
this
 person will create a case again and again without active punishment. By the practice of inaccessibility of the previous criminal data, the
juries
 will not have a chance to consider the previous action of the criminal which might affect the result of the trial. It is probably that the criminal would receive too light punishment that they should have been punished.
On the other hand
, many
people
 suggest that the laws should provide equality right for the criminals that they should be considered as innocent and the
juries
 are not able to use past crimes for making a
decision
. I agree that the criminal should have the right to defend themselves,
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 providing all backgrounds of the criminals is
also
 a great way to prove whether they are truly innocent or not. In conclusion, I disagree with the practice that
juries
 are not allowed to reach past criminal documents.
Moreover
, I suggest that
juries
 need to access all backgrounds of the defendant in order to provide a considerable
decision
.
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