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Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.

#people #noise #amount
It is often argued that
level
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 of
noise
 should be under tough control or
people
 may shout without any regulations.
This
 essay supports the idea that
noise
 is
source
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the source
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 of disturbance to other
people
 and should be punished. It is clear that city dwellers make a lot of
noise
,
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apply
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 while talking, driving or
on
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in
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 public meetings. So, in common it is an acceptable action to shout
on
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at
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 concerts, speaking loudly with friends or colleagues, even motorcyclists and drivers are not worried about their
noise
. In
Kazakhstan
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,Kazakhstan
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 there a many concerts and weddings that make a large amount of
noise
 and no one complains.
However
,
noise
 is
source
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the source
a source
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 of disturbance to other
people
 at
nights
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night
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, mornings and evenings. Everyone has time to have rest after work or studying,
usually
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,usually
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this
 time is from 6 pm to 8 am.
This
 relaxation time can be interrupted by
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a high-level
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high-level
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high level
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 of
noise
 outside, due to that stressful situation
people
 are often tired and get diseases as a consequence. When
me
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I
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 and my family lived in
populated
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a populated
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 area my parents and siblings could not have enough sleep in there, because of cars, shouting teenagers and adults.
Therefore
, we always had low-level of motivation and life pleasure. In conclusion,
noise
 is
controversial
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a controversial
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 topic, because it is hard to distinguish where
noise
 leads to disturbance or
complains
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complaints
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 and should be regulated.
Nevertheless
, punishing is the only way out to make
people
’s
live
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lives
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 without
noise
 and stress.
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