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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is common to see people getting updates about
latest
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news
 from the internet rather than the traditional way of reading a printed
newspaper
. I will agree that electronic sources of
news
 will gradually replace that of the
newspaper
.
Newspapers
 remain an important
source
 of
news
 for ample reasons.
Firstly
, the older generation still
prefer
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 to read their
news
this
 way, because they have traditionally bought a
newspaper
 over the years and
therefore
 do not want to change or simply they are not aware of how to use the latest technology.
In addition
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this
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 a
newspaper
also
 comes with other supplements like magazines, television guides and many more. Even, they give
other
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another source
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source
 of entertainment
such
 as crosswords, which makes it more attractive than
online
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an online
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source
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sources
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 of
news
.
However
, though
newspapers
 may not disappear completely, the internet is likely to become
more
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a more
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 convenient
source
 of
news
 in recent
time
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times
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.
Firstly
, younger people tend to read the
news
 online and prefer not to pay for it, so the older generation reading
newspapers
 will gradually decline.
Secondly
, media companies start to see a drop in income from
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a newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 which become unprofitable and they will
started
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 to find alternatives to make
profit
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a profit
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 with the help of
news
 broadcast online. Another reason is that it is
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an environment
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environment
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environmentally
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 friendly
source
 as there is no need
of
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for
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 paper, which can reduce deforestation
issue
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issues
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 and save our precious environment. It
also
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is also
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portable
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a portable
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source
 of
news
, which can save
the
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time of people. To exemplify, a person can read online
news
 on
mobile
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a mobile
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 phone while commuting to
office
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the office
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in
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by
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 bus or train. In conclusion,
although
newspapers
 remain popular nowadays, they will gradually be replaced by
the
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electronic sources of
news
.
This
 may be a loss given to history, but it is unavoidable development for our society.
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