IN SOME CULTURES, CHILDREN ARE OFTEN TOLD THEY CAN ACHIEVE ANYTHING IF THEY TRY HARD ENOUGH. WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF GIVING CHILDREN THIS MESSAGE?

Culture is a way of life of a given people or community, which can be in terms of their beliefs and traditions of doing things. Children who grew up in a culture where they are informed that all things are achievable if they work diligently, will develop
strong-willed
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mindset and are often Confident. A child whose culture encourages them to be Strong-willed, are more focused. They veer towards being
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and navigate towards
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course with less supervision, see
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as an adventure -" take the bull by the horns".
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, they could be arrogant and opinion dominating.
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and motivation that surrounds them. These can have both internal and external
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on their
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level. It's agreeable that
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a child through rights from wrongs aid
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in a world that's challenging. In as much as
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is a survival mechanism in today's world,
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a disadvantage because it makes one believe they know it all even when they don't which leads less effort on task and poor performance. In summary, resilience and
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when adequately communicated or thought to our kids
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us achieve the right amount of advantage to
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disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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