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İmmigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigrations? To what consequenced can it lead?

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Today in the world many people move to other countries or earas and
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 consequence can have several reasons of immigration and
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 essay will present results. In
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 global we are seeing that multitude of people immigrate to other area specially young people ,
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 issues have two of the important reasons:
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, being in deprived eara or country particularly teenages and younger nation that they have gift music, elite, hero and other skills of lives and if they don't move to other eara , they will be damage to themselves
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 it can not be answer their needs for destination;
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, lake money or good job will be consider about the immigration
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, living in village can not support for having excellent professional or it can not be expand for their talent, so many population have to immigrate to other areas. But ,about take place of immigration in the society, many crowd decide to move to big city or developed country and if they are beneficial human,
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 will be affect positively on other eara certainly positive affects to improve on the society
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, a person has the elite of electronic who it can be fastly extended development of industry power,
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 if a disadvantage person immediate to other origon it will be badly consequence
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 as : crime,murder,theif and so on. The conclusion, every one want to destination their goal and nobody can not recognize to their program without movement and either positive or negative influence on society
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 as: culture, economic, sience and so on.
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