Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn team work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although
it is considered by certain individuals that
sports
teach students to be competitive, others believe that
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teamwork
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team work
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teamwork
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is
also
important to be taught. I believe in my opinion, that
sports
train a child to work as a
group
since it as it helps to achieve a common goal by taking
decision
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a decision
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as a
group
and eliminates selfishness On the one hand, some believe that playing
sports
teaches students to compete at a school level.
In other words
, competing
each
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other at a young age will help them to motivate themselves to work hard to achieve their objective thereby creating a generation of
children
who will carry on these traits in their professional life as well.
For instance
,
sports
events in China are very competitive and teachers start training
children
as young as 5 years old since
this
is projected during the
Olymics
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Olympics
2020, where China had the most number of gold medal wins.
On the other hand
, others think that
sports
promotes
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team
woking
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working
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skills because
sports
games,
for
instance
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football and rugby
is
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played as a
group
where decisions taken by one player will affect the whole
team
.
This
trains the
children
at
young
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age to think how their decisions will affect others, thereby adapt
this
stype
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type
style
of thinking when they are older and I agree with
this
.
In addition
, playing
sports
as a
team
eliminates being selfish where only one person
take
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credit for winning,
instead
they consider winning as a
group
. In conclusion, it is evident that despite some
believe
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that
sports
teaches
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children
to be competitive, I believe it encourages
team
working since it helps them to take decisions as a
team
and does not promote selfishness when taking credit for their win.
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