Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn team work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although

it is considered by certain individuals that

sports

teach students to be competitive, others believe that

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teamwork

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team work

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teamwork

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also

important to be taught. I believe in my opinion, that

sports

train a child to work as a

group

since it as it helps to achieve a common goal by taking

decision

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a decision

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as a

group

and eliminates selfishness On the one hand, some believe that playing

sports

teaches students to compete at a school level.

In other words

, competing

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other at a young age will help them to motivate themselves to work hard to achieve their objective thereby creating a generation of

children

who will carry on these traits in their professional life as well.

For instance

sports

events in China are very competitive and teachers start training

children

as young as 5 years old since

this

is projected during the

Olymics

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Olympics

2020, where China had the most number of gold medal wins.

On the other hand

, others think that

sports

promotes

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team

woking

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working

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skills because

sports

games,

for

instance

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,instance

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football and rugby

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played as a

group

where decisions taken by one player will affect the whole

team

This

trains the

children

young

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age to think how their decisions will affect others, thereby adapt

this

stype

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type

style

of thinking when they are older and I agree with

this

In addition

, playing

sports

as a

team

eliminates being selfish where only one person

take

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takes

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credit for winning,

instead

they consider winning as a

group

. In conclusion, it is evident that despite some

believe

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that

sports

teaches

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teach

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children

to be competitive, I believe it encourages

team

working since it helps them to take decisions as a

team

and does not promote selfishness when taking credit for their win.

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