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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent

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It is argued that parenting skills should be taught to every young person in their
school
 itself. I agree that
school
 is the best place for the youth to start learning the skills involved to become a good
parent
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.
This
 essay discusses how an institution can impart the virtues of taking
care
 without expectations and putting other's needs before yours,
thus
 making you a great guardian.
Firstly
, it is pivotal that a good father or a good mother has the quality of taking
care
 of their children without expecting anything in return.
One
 can learn
this
 habit by observing a teacher taking
care
 of their students or a mentor empowering a mentee to grow. I personally learnt how to take
care
 of someone selflessly in an effective manner by looking at
one
 of my professors who had to teach a handicapped student in my class.
Furthermore
, an institution has a myriad of team-building activities which helps the young
one
 understand that the overall results are important than individual performances. The same metaphor can be applied to your family being the team. It can help the young
one
 know that if their child succeeds, they succeed too. As
one
 of the famous
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 Mary Kom mentioned in
one
 of her interviews, that her mother left her own ambitions to let her daughter achieve her goals. Her mother learnt
this
 quality from a team-building
bootcamp
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 at the age of 13. In conclusion, a person quickly learns all the good quality especially the art of caring and selflessness in their
school
 itself.
Hence
, it is agreed that these things should be included in the
school
's curriculum.
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