Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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people
prefer to
travel
around the world with
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purpose of gaining memorable
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and for personal recharge. Some
people
perceive journey as their lifestyle and spend big
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of
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on high costly tour agencies, while others claim that
traveling
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is just
money
and
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process.
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essay will contain both views and arguments according to
importance
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the importance
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of
traveling
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. To start with,
advent
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the advent
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of improved infrastructure and special recreational objects accumulated amount of tourists accepting worldwide
travel
as spiritual value and source of motivation.
People
spend
money
on
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, so they can get rid of stress collected from
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process, adversity or emotional problems being
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of their own calamities.
Secondly
,
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voyages can be chosen as a way of forming tolerant
child
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children
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in the long run by their own parents. It can be explained by huge role journeys abroad has on increasing child’s background knowledge about cultural diversity, to widen their global vision and broaden horizons.
Otherwise
, some
people
tend to believe that
traveling
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is just a waste of
money
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because it requires a lot of
money
for some aspects as
travel
agency services, flights, accommodations, transfer, food and etc. There are compelling arguments in
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of the idea that several tours and excursions have a negative impact on a person's
time
frame and budget.
First
of all, most
people
in
third
world countries receive
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pay
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that may have been inadequate to cover their family's running costs. Large families with more than 4 children spend way too much
time
on organizational processes and it may be
money
consuming and financially afford
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actions. To sum, I certainly agree that
advantages
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the advantages
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traveling
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provides
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much exceed the drawbacks.
As a result
, I believe that those who
travel
for a longer period of
time
rather than making frequent journeys will benefit their mental health and will have a better understanding of humanity's diverse customs and traditions.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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