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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
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people
 have
interest
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to
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in
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history
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the history
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 of a thing in
place
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the place
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 where they live. Exactly,
people
 want to know and learn something. They are many information
in
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on
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 the internet to get knowledge. In fact, there are some main reasons that might lead to check fascinating
places
. In the past,
people
 created buildings that have
difference
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differences
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with
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from
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 indoor what we have
face
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 now. Definitely, you want to explore thing which can surprise.
In addition
, every city
have
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has
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 their own
history
 and historical
places
.
For example
, famous “YouTube” blogger from Russia Dima Maslennikov
traveled
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travelled
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 all prohibited buildings with
history
 and he shot it to
camera
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the camera
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 and put it on
channel
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the channel
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 to show what the circumstances
was
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were
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 faces with him. He has 12 million followers,
its
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which
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 mean that
a
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apply
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historical
places
 are interested
for
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in
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most
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the most
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 population. The main reason to find out information about
this
 type of
places
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place
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 is
people
 wanted to have a knowledge of buildings around. All details about everything can find
in
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on
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 the internet and
books
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in books
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. You must
to
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apply
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write
a
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the
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 name of
this
 construction and computers did all work for you and give what you want to look into. One type of
people
 that have money or time, they can go to
this
 building and enjoy of
picture
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the picture
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. The easiest one is
ask
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to ask
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 to
question
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a question
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for
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apply
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you
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your
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history
 teacher and have a chat about
this
. In conclusion,
history
 is the best thing
what
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that
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 we have. There are enough
places
 to explore . That’s why
people
 have
behavior
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behaviour
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 that
make
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makes
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people
to
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apply
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learn everything
around
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themaround
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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