Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Almost any day of the week we can look at a newspaper and read articles discussing
about
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tourism. There are several points of view on
this
matter. The
first
claims that travelling is
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however
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an alternative point regards that it is
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pointless spending of time and money.
This
essay will discuss both sides and gives
own
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opinion. On the one hand, it is obvious that in recent years there have been some changes in tourism and
this
trend becoming more and more popular.
Firstly
, during the little vacation in other
places
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people
can improve their
horizon
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.
For instance
,
this
hobby allows
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the traveler
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traveler
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travelers
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to learn more about the traditions and culture of any place,
also
to see its
colorful
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and diverse sights.
Moreover
, during a little vacation
people
improve their knowledge
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languages by communicating with
native
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speaker
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.
However
,
this
attitude may cause a lot of concerns among
people
who believe that travelling is not
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useful
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experience.
Firstly
, travel expenses for famous tourist destinations are expensive. In
this
case, during the peak seasons, the prices of food, housing, and services can increase significantly and
people
can overpay twice as much as it costs.
Secondly
, the photo or story does not always correspond to reality. Pollution and waste from other tourists are left behind, which will
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effect
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the overall view and leave an unpleasant impression of memories.
In addition
, there is a risk that there will be a sharp jump in climatic conditions, which is
also
a bad influence on the perception of rest. I personally believe that
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wastes a considerable amount of time that I could have spent usefully, and money that could have been spent on necessary things or on education.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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