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In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?

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Currently is well know that a huge number of
people
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 spends less time with their
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 than they used to do in the previous generation. There are a huge variety of motives why it happens.
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, as far as I am concern two main reasons could explain it. The
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 one is because nowadays
people
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 are busy with their own lives and the majority of
people
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 have been living in a huge condominium, like a city, where a thousand
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 live as
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 it is extremely difficult to meet each other.
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 reason,
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 are extremely busy nowadays if we compare it with the past.
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, when I was a child, my mother did not work out of home, and she used to spend all day at home, the same situation happened with our
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,
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, they used to make friendship effortless. But unfortunately, today my life is completely different from the life of my mother. I work in an office, and I usually arrived home late every day
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 I do not have time to meet better who my
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 are. To solve situations like that I believe
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 should try to meet their
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 as they can help each other in different situations. Another cause for
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 problem is that
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 have been living, here in São Paulo is quite common, in a huge condominium, where, live a plethora of
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, and most of them had moved after getting married.
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, having a good friendship with their
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 is almost impossible. To minimize
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 situation, I believe that the condo should periodically propose, a kind of celebration at the party hall in order to give an opportunity
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meet
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 better each other. In conclusion, losing the relationship with
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 is a problem since when they have
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relationship
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, they can build a sense of community in that
neighborhood
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. Sometimes,
people
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 live in different cities of their relatives and
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 are the only person who can help them.
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, a simple change in their daily habits and a bit of effort is the probable solutions to the matter.
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