In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In less developed countries, the lack of educational provision for people in rural areas is a serious problem. While some commentators argue that installing more computers and extending
Internet
connection can help to solve
this
problem, I believe that it is better to provide more
schools
and
teachers
for remote areas. On the one hand, providing more computers and widening
internet
access is beneficial to some extent.
Firstly
, the
Internet
offers an unlimited source of knowledge.
Therefore
, students can take advantage of distance learning courses, giving pupils the same opportunities as those in city
schools
.
Secondly
, by having access to the
Internet
, pupils can acquire more IT
skills
. It is evident that without
such
skills
, people cannot   learn how to use Microsoft Office or Microsoft Word and search for information online.
Such
skills
help them to improve their future employment prospects.
On the other hand
, I agree with those who contend that constructing more
schools
and employing
teachers
  can tackle
this
problem. A
first
benefit is that
teachers
play a vital role in the early stage of teaching basic literacy and numeracy
skills
.
Therefore
, without
teachers
, these devices are little more than playthings. In these early years, the teacher is a mentor who interacts directly with the children, enlightens them, and instils in them the value of learning. Another benefit is that the more
schools
there are, the more likely the realisation of the goal of universal education is. With guidance from
teachers
, pupils can make the most of  online resources, and the educational level in developing countries will be raised. In conclusion,
although
installing more computers and widening
internet
connections are beneficial to some extent, it seems to me that constructing more
schools
and employing more
teachers
should be a top priority.
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