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Some universities now offer their course in the internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development.

#universities #offer #course #internet #people #study #development
It can be seen that online learning becoming a popular function of
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university
education
.
Although
 there are some drawbacks of online courses, I would argue that there are far more benefits.
To begin
 with, the main drawback of online
university
 learning is that there is less direct interaction.
People
 who are studied in
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may not have a chance to engage
face
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face
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of
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outdoor activities by only using
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Similarly
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 online do not come
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 direct with each other and
this
 would have a negative impact
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 and exchange
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For example
, whereas students
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 can meet their teacher for some
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 and discuss
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the interesting topic after
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. These reasons would bring some attractive competition to
face
 to
face
 learning. Despite, the negative mentioned above, I believe that online
university
 learning is a beneficial development that
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 a variety of supporting reason.
Firstly
,
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 could learn from various places around the world which the internet is accessible. So that
people
 may work wherever and whenever is convenient.
Secondly
, the cost of
university
education
 would be greatly reduced, while revenues for institutions might increase as more as the number of students could be taught.
For example
, some
people
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 able to move from country to country,
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could
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online
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 courses from overseas which they want to study. If online learning did not have in the
education
, those
people
 would not have an opportunity to learn from aboard,
that is
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 in online
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 In conclusion, while I recognize the disadvantages of online learning, I consider it to be more a positive development far more negative.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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