While many people believe that global environmental problems should be dealt with internationally rather that domestically. What is your opinion?

Some individuals suggest that global ecological
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should be addressed
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an international arena rather than on a national level. The essay thinks that environmental issues must be solved on all possible levels, including individual, national and international approaches. In the
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decades, humanity has been facing various
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,
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as global warming, deforestation and melting polar ice caps
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habitat destruction and many others too. Some of these issues are global, some are not.
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, it should be taken into consideration that
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of national environmental
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can lead to
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of some global ones
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being interconnected.
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, the Amazon rainforest, often called the " Lungs of the Earth", has faced devastating deforestation in Brazil owing to cattle farming,
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and mining;over 1 million square kilometres have already been lost. Despite looking as a national problem,
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still a global problem, because of being a trigger for global warming and air contamination. Solutions to
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problems
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should be maintained and applied both internally and domestically.
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, in 2015, nearly all nations signed the Paris Agreement, aiming to limit global warming to well 2°C; which justifies an important role of global cooperation in tackling climate change.
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, wanting to change something to a better side, all should play roles in climate action. Each individual leaves environmental footprints; by promoting environmental education, our society can contribute to that process effectively. Spreading environmental awareness and adopting sustainable practices by social circles will help governments in addressing environmental
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, the "Fridays for
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" movement in Sweden has mobilized millions of young people globally, highlighting the power of youth-led climate action. One more example was observed at COP 29 taking place in Baku, Azerbaijan, where approximately 30 stands were represented by eco-activists from various universities of the republic boosting environmental consciousness.
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society argues if global environmental
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must be addressed on a domestic or worldwide level, the essay supports the idea of all-rounded solutions in order to be more effective.

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Revise the thesis statement to make it more direct. Consider explicitly stating your position on domestic vs international approaches.
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Provide clearer linkages between examples and the main argument in some sections.
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You provided strong examples and evidence to support your arguments, particularly the mention of the Paris Agreement and youth-led movements.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
  • political systems
  • enforcement
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