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Many people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that it has minor influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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At present, most
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 believe the culture has influenced by the place
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's born. Whereas some others think birthplace has a mere influence. Many countries that follow strong customs have some space in their minds for other cultures too. In
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 essay, both points will be discussed and at the end, the writer will give his opinion on the topic. On the
one
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 hand, there are uncountable cultures live among us. Some
people
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 do not believe in those customs, but many
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 strictly follow their beliefs.
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, in India majority of the farm work get done by cows and buffaloes. As
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, Hindus consider the cow as a god because cows provide most of the products for their survival. As gratitude for cows, Hindus do not eat beef even though they live in western countries.
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, we live in a small world, where you can travel from
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 end to the other in hours. Due to
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 fact, many nationalities live in different countries, and they embark on other's cultural beliefs as their own. As
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, Christmas is mainly a Christian's celebration. But many nonchristian believers
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 decorate their houses with Christmas trees and lights as respect. To conclude, even though both the points of view have many backing up reasons. I do believe that the country of
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's born will not strongly impact on their cultural beliefs.
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 is due to the impact of globalization because it has broadened the knowledge of
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 towards other societies.
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