Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. Do you agree or disagree?

There is a view that
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products
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that are harmful to people’s
health
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should be banned from
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.
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some oppose
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notion , I personally argue in favour. On the one hand, banning unhealthy
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and drinks could help create a healthier society. Many
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as sugary drinks, salty snacks, and fast
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are linked to serious
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issues like obesity, diabetes, and heart disease. In my country,
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, the number of overweight people is increasing
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the popularity of fast
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. If
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harmful
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were not sold in
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, people would be encouraged to make healthier choices,
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as eating fruits and vegetables.
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, the
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public
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would improve and medical costs might be reduced.
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, banning these
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might violate people's freedom of choice. Individuals should have the right to decide what they eat, even if their choices are unhealthy.
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, many businesses, especially small
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, depend on selling popular snacks and soft drinks to make a profit. If these
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are banned, it could lead to financial difficulties, job losses, and even the closure of some
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, which would hurt the local economy. In conclusion,
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banning unhealthy
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might have some negative effects on businesses and personal freedom, I believe it is necessary to protect public
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and encourage a healthier lifestyle for future generations.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction and keep it consistent throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Link your ideas more smoothly between sentences and paragraphs to help the reader follow your thoughts easier.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction clearly presents the topic and your position.
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You provide relevant examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.

Word Count

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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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