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Many people believe that the world’s most urgent problems can only be solved by international collaboration. Do you agree or disagree?

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The
world
’s most urgent problems should be solved through international collaboration. I generally agree that
countries
 working together can effectively solve international problems. Poverty is one of the most urgent issues in the
world
 and financial
support
 is required in poor
countries
. As families in poverty need water, food, sanitation and medical service, developed
countries
 should
support
 them by funding.
However
, sufficient funding is required, so many
countries
 should collaborate and donate money to impoverished
countries
.
In addition
, poor counties ask for
support
 to improve the country’s economy. If a single country supports the poor economy, the burden is too heavy and presses their economy. As there is no single strategy, many people from other
countries
 should propose solutions. International conflict is another issue international groups should resolve.
Countries
 in power should hold regular conferences and establish international regulations to maintain
world
 peace. As a single county cannot authorize
world
 regulations, many
countries
 should cooperate and make decisions. If most of the
countries
 in the
world
 join the conference and make a consensus about maintaining
world
 peace, the number of international conflicts will decline.
Furthermore
, once the dispute starts between
countries
, other
countries
 need to mitigate it. Other
countries
 can limit the export of foods and other important materials to suppress the conflicts. In conclusion, one country has limited authority and money to solve urgent problems in the
world
. I believe that international collaboration between developed and developing
countries
 can strongly
support
countries
 suffering from poverty and those in the middle of a war.
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