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Many people believe that the world’s most urgent problems can only be solved by international collaboration. Do you agree or disagree?

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The
world
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’s most urgent problems should be solved through international collaboration. I generally agree that
countries
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 working together can effectively solve international problems. Poverty is one of the most urgent issues in the
world
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 and financial
support
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 is required in poor
countries
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. As families in poverty need water, food, sanitation and medical service, developed
countries
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 should
support
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 them by funding.
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, sufficient funding is required, so many
countries
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 should collaborate and donate money to impoverished
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.
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, poor counties ask for
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 to improve the country’s economy. If a single country supports the poor economy, the burden is too heavy and presses their economy. As there is no single strategy, many people from other
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 should propose solutions. International conflict is another issue international groups should resolve.
Countries
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 in power should hold regular conferences and establish international regulations to maintain
world
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 peace. As a single county cannot authorize
world
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 regulations, many
countries
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 should cooperate and make decisions. If most of the
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 in the
world
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 join the conference and make a consensus about maintaining
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 peace, the number of international conflicts will decline.
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, once the dispute starts between
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, other
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 need to mitigate it. Other
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 can limit the export of foods and other important materials to suppress the conflicts. In conclusion, one country has limited authority and money to solve urgent problems in the
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. I believe that international collaboration between developed and developing
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 can strongly
support
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countries
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 suffering from poverty and those in the middle of a war.
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