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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The chart illustrates the proportions of household
items
 in owned and leased accommodations in two cities of UK, England, and Wales respectively, from 1918 to 2011. Overall, the
items
 that
consists
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in
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 rented and owned houses show reversed sinusoidal pattern to each other. At the beginning of the given time period, house owners had
less
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 households, yet the
tenants
 had more than three times
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 in their houses compared to owned residents.
However
, in 2011,
items
 in owned houses almost doubled that of
tenants
, and it was peaked in the previous decade. The domestic
items
 in both categories got almost equal in
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 by reversing the trend of owners and
tenants
. The owned residents showed less interest in collecting domestic
items
 and the
tenants
 showed much interest in increasing households in their apartments, approximately 20% and 75% respectively. The owned residents showed increasing trend till 2001 which was peaked with a value slightly less than 70%, yet it was less than the
items
 owned by
tenants
 in 1918.
On the other hand
,
tenants
 reduced their domestic item consumption gradually till 2001 and after that year it showed
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 increase.
However
, in
80’s
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 both
tenants
 and house owners accounted for
same
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 number of domestic
items
 with exactly 50%, before they reversed their consumption pattern.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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